RSS Feed
Ian 30

Curs: Raspunsurile mele

Posted on Vineri, Ianuarie 30, 2009 in Creative writing

Aici sunt raspunsurile mele la exercitiile pe care vi le-am aratat ieri. Sunt doar niste exemple. Ale voastre pot fi de mii de ori mai frumoase ca ale mele sau diferite in toate felurile. Nu trebuie sa le luati decat ca pe un simplu exemplu. Nu prea exista bine si rau in asta. E Fiecare cu stilul lui.

 

1. Va voi pune aici doar ce am scris eu pentru simtul pipaitului:

 

I remember I had a small green toy made out of a rubber baloon filled with flour. I always had the fealing that my fingers would sink in too much as I pressed hard into it’s core. The exterior packing had a firm grip on my fingers but the flour used to slip inside from one place to the other until it changed form alltogether.

 

2. The trees swayed at side of the road as Richard drove. He was tired and still thinking of his wife sleeping in bed as the sun came up.

 

The late autumn trees with their rusty old crowns swayed in the fast winds of the october days. This fiery ballet of nature nearing the end of the years cycle on the side of the fast gray road on which Richard drove. His eyes grew heavierwith the monotons  view of the winter aproaching. He felt the heavy burden of his passed nights on the skin of his face and muscles of his arms and feet. But while engaged in the tiering drive he still couldn’ take his mind of the soft pink skin and rose pettal smell of his beautifull wife sleeping in the sweet caress of the golden rays of light.

Ian 30

Curs: Detalii sensoriale 1

Posted on Vineri, Ianuarie 30, 2009 in Creative writing

Continuam cu acel curs despre care am vorbit ieri. O sa fie in mare o treaba saptamanala, acum este o exceptie pentru ca saptamana trecuta nu am scris nimic despre el. In sedinta de saptamana asta am vazut cum se folosesc detaliile sensoriale.

Avem cinci simturi de baza (spun de baza pentru ca oamenii au mai pretins ca exista si al saselea si asa) vazul, auzul, mirosul, gustul si pipaitul. Pentru a concepe un paragraf trebuie sa stim in primul rand ideea acestuia. Va voi da exemplul din clasa care sper sa nu va deranjeze insa nu m-am deranjat sa il traduc: (more…)